Comma pre test

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Comma pre test

• //www2.ivcc.edu/eng1002/practice_comma_quiz.htm

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Appositive

• A words which follow a noun to describe it in
  another name

My best friend, Lee, caught a tire when he was fishing for bass.                  
If the appositive is just additional information
(i.e., you could remove it from the sentence
without any loss of meaning), then it should be
offset from the remainder of the sentence
(usually with commas).?
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Restrictive Clause

• Presents information that restricts or limits the
  meaning of another word
• People who live in glass houses shouldnt throw
  stones.
• The phrase who live in glass houses restricts
  the kind of people I am talking about.

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Restrictive clauses

• Identify antecedent noun
• The novelist Jane Austen (identifies novelist)
• The poet Yeats

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Non-restrictive clauses

• Are parenthetic.
• They dont limit or define. They add something.
• The dog, who had one leg, wobbled slowly down the
  sidewalk.
• Who,
• What
• Wheredont restrict or limit, they add something

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Practice

• Shakespeares play Romeo and Juliet deals with
  the theme of revenge.
• (restrictive or non-restrictive?)
• Shakespeares play Romeo and Juliet.
• Restrictive because Shakespeare wrote more than
  one play. Romeo and Juliet needs to be treated as
  a restrictive clause because it is restricting
  which play the writer is talking about.

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Nominative and Objective case

• Nominative pronouns Subject of the sentence
  (also used for comparision)
• I, she, he, they, we
• I saw, she saw, they saw, we saw
• Objective case object of sentence
• Me, her, him, them, us

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Objective (
Nominative/Subjective

• I ran
• She hit
• He
• They
• We
• Who
• Hit Me
• Kissed Her
• Saw Him
• Waved to Them
• Showed Us
• To whom
• (To whom it concerns it concerns him)

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Was Sara or she/her cast in the show?

• Was Sara or she cast in the show?
• She was cast in the show. (subjective case

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Sara can sing better than I/me

• Sara can sing better than I (can sing.)
• I can sing is the subject, or subjective case.
• Pronoun in a comparison is always in the
  nominative case if it is ithe subject of the verb.

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To whom/who is the letter addressed?

• To whom/who is the letter addressed?
• The letter is addressed to him (Objective case)

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Whom/who

• Give this work to who/whomever looks idle.
• _____looks idle
• He looks idle
• Give this work to who looks idle
• (Subjective case) He is the subject of looks
  idle.

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Looking at first draft

• Looking at opening line hooking the reader
• Did you use one of the intros we looked at in
  class?
• Creative
• Action
• Dialogue
• Personal introduction (I used to be cool)

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Dont use some of the following

• 1 Avoid using quotes or questions. Quotes from
  non-famous people work better. Starting with a
  question is lazy.
• 2. Avoid restating the college application
  question in the first sentence. Not effective as
  a hook.

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Content

• Is your essay focused on one main
  event/person/belief?
• Do you tell a story that explains the how or why
  of your topic?
• If notfind one. Make your essay specific and not
  a list.

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Dont Digress
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Reflection

• Did you explain why this topic is important?
• -How do you know this event/person/change/belief
  is important?
• -What did it/they teach you?

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Add more

• On back of essay restate why this is an
  important story. What else did you learn that you
  forgot to include in the essay?
• What were you like before?
• -How have you been changed?
• -What action did you or will you take to show
  college that you were affected by this
  story/person?

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Concrete detail

• Have you illustrated your examples?
• Example My dad helped me move.
• Seventeen years later he showed up with a U-Haul
  rigged to pick-up his outside my apartment in
  Nebraska.

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Concrete detail

• I used to be a pretty deep guy.
• gives examples how I was Gary Snyder seeking
  enlightenment

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Circle places where you could add detail
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For Thursdays revision

• -rework intro
• -add illustrative detail
• -think about oganization (beg.mid-end)
• -look at style and conventions on rubric.
• Bring in two copies one for me with your name on
  it one to be peer edited with an alias on it.

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Wednesday

• Quiz EOS
• Collect logs
• Active Voice

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Thursday

• Today you and I will look at different ways to
  revise vague statements, repetitive phrases that
  repeat themselves and unnecessarily wordy
  sentences.
• Whats up with this?
• FIX IT PLEASE!

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revisions
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REVISION

• Today we will work on revision of imprecise and
  wordy sentences.

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Whats up with this?

• I have to admit that theater did not come
  naturally to me, and I remember that I felt
  remarkably self-conscious and nervous the first
  few times I set foot on the stage.The first time
  I was on stage was in eighth grade when my best
  friend talked me into auditioning for our
  schools performance of Romeo and Juliet.

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• Theater did not come naturally to me, and I felt
  remarkably self-conscious and nervous the first
  few times I set foot on stage in the eighth
  grade. My best friend had talked me into
  auditioning for Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet.

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Vague and Imprecise Language

• I like lots of things about basketball. For one,
  the activity allows me to develop abilities that
  will help me in future endeavors.

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Vague and Imprecise Language
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• "Not only do I find basketball fun, but the sport
  has helped me develop my leadership and
  communication skills, as well as my ability to
  work with a team. As a result, my love of
  basketball will make me a better business major."

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Looking at a second draft

• Go through rubric and score the essay
• AS YOU READ
• circle wordiness
• repetition
• circle a lots
• circle Things
• Circle any unspecific nouns and ask writer to
  make them specific.
• abilities (which ones)
• Talents (which ones?)

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When you are done

• Staple rubric to essay and replace on front desk.
• Return to your seat and pull out Strunk and
  White. Review for tomorrows quiz
• Work on grammar log.

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• Admissions Reader Comments?Reading the essay, I
  get the sense that Nina is both intellectually
  curious and committed to scientific and
  environmental research. Though Nina's essay is
  well written, what makes it so strong is that it
  also conveys a personal connection to larger
  environmental issues. Too often, students write
  about issues- political, educational,
  environmental, etc.-in an impersonal and
  argumentative way. The college essay isn't a
  thesis it's meant to be a reflection of who the
  student is, and Nina's love of the ocean, of
  travel, and of the environment gives me a glimpse
  of who she is as an individual.?Dana Messinger,
  Senior Assistant Director of Admissions