STUDY PLUS: Unit 5

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STUDY PLUS Unit 5

Disaster Relief
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Lesson Objectives

• To learn how to redraft our formal letters.
• To write a a 60 second news bulletin for a
  fictional disaster.

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Formal letters
We are now going to redraft the letters that we
constructed last session. But first, we must
create a whole - class redrafting checklist
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Formal language

• No contracted words (cant - can not)
• No abbreviations (fridge - refrigerator
• T.V - television)
• Standard English (wheres that to? - where is
  that?)
• No colloquial/slang (its out of order! - That
  is not fair!)

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P
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DA FOREST
D Direct language A Alliteration/Anecdote F
Facts O Opinions R Repetition/
Rhetorical Question E Emotive language S
Statistics T The Rule of Three
Purpose why? Audience who? language
style? Layout form?
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Using connectives when writing to persuade
EXPLAINING IDEAS namely      such as as already stated  for example in other words 
PUTTING IDEAS IN ORDER firstly       further most  importantly  secondly  finally lastly
ADDING TO IDEAS in addition    also           likewise         moreover furthermore  similarly
CONCLUSION therefore     all this evidence  points to   in conclusion  finally all in all  
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Whole class guided writing

• We have been asked to put together a short
  message (paragraph of thanks) to put in the next
  SDCC newsletter, thanking the students for
  supporting our mufti day and encouraging them to
  participate in our forthcoming Disaster Day.

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60 Second News Report
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You are journalists

• You have one hour before the news is going to
  be broadcast and you need to inform the nation
  about a natural disaster that has just hit
  Britain.
• You must work in pairs to prepare a 60 second
  script to be read aloud on the 6 Oclock News

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• News update The Green Warriors,
  environmental crusaders, have stormed the Houses
  of Parliament and attacked many members of
  parliament, throwing vegetables and eggs at
  them... They are also threatening to blow up any
  businesses who do not recycle all their paper
  the whole city of London has come to a complete
  standstill .... the business community is in
  uproar ... the Police are attempting to control
  the situation through persuasion... The Green
  Warriors claim they will not budge until their
  demands for a more environmentally friendly world
  are met ... They are demanding to meet with the
  world's top scientists to discuss ways forward ..

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• NEWS UPDATE ... No-Roadies,
  environmental crusaders ... have formed a protest
  outside Oldbury ... They are living in trees and
  tunnels to stop the work going aheadThey have
  attacked many of the builders of the new road
  with their bare hands and feet ... the whole
  neighbouring area of Berkshire has come to a
  standstill because of the demonstration ...
  lorries with vital supplies for the local
  hospital are not able to get through ... the
  Police are concerned for Public Safety and are
  preparing to disperse the protestors ... The
  No-Roadies hold banners which proclaim "No more
  new Roads in Oldbury" ... They demand that the
  proposed new road is banned because of more
  pollution and traffic to local house-holders
  ...... Top scientists have been called in to see
  if they can solve the problem ...

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You will need to consider

• 1) the formality of language choices,
• 2) selection of content, (5 Ws H)
• 3) length of items,
• 4) attitude to listeners assumed prior
  knowledge.
• Remember how to create a quick plan! E.g Mind
  map your ideas and number them to create a
  cohesive structure.

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Plenary

• Lets record our news scripts and consider how
  convincing they are.