Title: Fragments and Run-ons
1Fragments and Run-ons
- Keep sowing your seed, for you never know which
will grow-perhaps it all will.
Ecclesiasties
2By now you should be able to identify isolated
fragments or run-ons.
- Now, lets try identifying and correcting
fragments and run-ons in paragraphs. This is a
more realistic grammar exercise.
3Identify and correct the fragments
- Knowing that tonight was the biggest game of his
life. Sergio began to practice his jumps and
cheers early in the morning. By 830AM he had
gotten in a good hour and a half of practice.
Which was much more than what he really needed.
But he then felt that he was truly ready. He ate
a light breakfast and just munched on energy bars
for the rest of the day. Because he wanted to
feel light and energetic that night. All his
hard work and careful preparation. Were not
wasted since he cheered with great spontaneity
and verve for the whole game.
4 Corrected version
- Knowing that tonight was the biggest game of his
life, Sergio began to practice his jumps and
cheers early in the morning. By 830AM, he had
gotten in a good hour and a half of practice
which was much more than what he really needed.
But he then felt that he was truly ready. He ate
a light breakfast and just munched on energy bars
for the rest of the day because he wanted to feel
light and energetic that night. All his hard
work and careful preparation were not wasted
since he cheered with great spontaneity and
verve for the whole game.
5Correct the fragments. The FBI agent, a
tall slender man with a shotgun in his hands,
hid behind the mesquite tree. While his partners
surrounded the evil convict. A man who had
escaped from jail several times and knew his way
around the law. However, today would be the
last day of his life. Because a military SWAT
team and a helicopter were on their way. There
was no way that this convict would escape today.
He had three options commit suicide, surrender
or die fighting. Options one and two were out
of the question. Option three was the only way
he knew how to go. A battle to the death!
6Corrected paragraph. The FBI agent, a
tall slender man with a shotgun in his hands,
hid behind the mesquite tree while his partners
surrounded the evil convict, a man who had
escaped from jail several times and knew his way
around the law. However, today would be the
last day of his life because a military SWAT team
and a helicopter were on their way. There was no
way that this convict would escape today. He had
three options commit suicide, surrender or
die fighting. Options one and two were out of
the question. Option three was the only way he
knew how to go, a battle to the death!
7Lets try a paragraphs with run-on problems.
- Writing is not an easy task sometimes you think
you have the perfect phrase, but when you read
it the next day it seem perfectly awful. The sad
thing about writing is that you usually have to
write alone. . You can get some help from time
to time, but essentially you have to come up with
everything yourself. Then there is dreaded
writers block some type of mental problem that
attacks writers unexpectedly. All of a sudden
you cant think of one decent sentence all your
sentences and thoughts seem nonsensical, without
meaning.
8Corrected paragraph
- Writing is not an easy task. Sometimes you
think you have the perfect phrase, but when you
read it the next day it seem perfectly awful.
The sad thing about writing is that you usually
have to write alone. . You can get some help
from time to time, but essentially you have to
come up with everything yourself. Then there is
dreaded writers block. Some type of mental
problem that attacks writers unexpectedly. All
of a sudden you cant think of one decent
sentence. All your sentences and thoughts seem
nonsensical, without meaning.
9Correct , both fragments and run-ons
- As Marisol wrote her letter. She decided that it
would be a good idea to send some money to her
husband. Her husband was at war in Afghanistan
and she thought that maybe he could use a couple
of extra dollars. She had heard that Afghanistan
was very cold in the winter and perhaps he needed
to buy some extra warm mittens or cap so she
jumped into her car and drove off to the nearby
bank where she kept all her money. She withdrew
one hundred dollars and went to purchase a money
order at the closest circle K. When she was
getting into her car. She noticed a couple of
suspicious teenagers at the stop sign they were
all wearing bandanas and red and black garments.
They appeared to be members of some sinister
gang. When she stopped, they forced her out of
her car.
10- Corrected version
- As Marisol wrote her letter, she decided
that it would be a good idea to send some money
to her husband. Her husband was at war in
Afghanistan, and she thought that maybe he could
use a couple of extra dollars. She had heard that
Afghanistan was very cold in the winter, and
perhaps he needed to buy some extra warm mittens
or cap so she jumped into her car and drove off
to the nearby bank where she kept all her money.
She withdrew one hundred dollars and went to
purchase a money order at the closest circle K.
When she was getting into her car, she noticed a
couple of suspicious teenagers at the stop sign.
They were all wearing bandanas and red and black
garments. They appeared to be members of some
sinister gang. When she stopped, they forced her
out of her car.
11Assignment This passage contains both fragment
and run-ons
- But what these young thugs did not know is that
Marisol had recently earned a black belt in
karate and was itching for a good fight. Plus,
she was angry that her husband was away at war.
They thought that Marisol would just cry and give
them all her money at first they thought that
Marisol was joking when she warned them that she
had a black belt. But when the fight began. They
soon realized that Marisol was a genuine martial
artist. They were three gang members. The first
she put down with a wicked karate chop to the
throat. Which stopped him from breathing for a
good while and paralyzed him. The second youth
went down when Marisol bashed his head into the
hood of the car. He suffered a broken nose. And a
concussion as well. The third youth decided that
he was better off running than facing the wrath
of the karate master, Marisol there was no way
that Marisol was going to let these scumbags take
her money! -
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