Unit One : Write for Clarity

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Unit One Write for Clarity
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• The number of banks charging their customers ATM
  user fees are increasing.
• Revised The number of banks charging their
  customers ATM user fees is increasing.

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• The majority of the committee feel that the right
  decision was made.
• Revised The majority of the committee feels
  that the right decision was made.

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• Time as well as temperature are important during
  the batch process.
• Revised Time as well as temperature is
  important during the batch process.

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• The professor told the student that he needed to
  finish early.
• Revised The professor told the student, "You
  need to finish early."

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• To simulate the program, precautions must be
  taken by the engineer.
• Revised To simulate the program, the engineer
  must take precautions.

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• As a graduate student, my academic advisor gave
  me much valuable advice.
• Revised My academic advisor gave me much
  valuable advice when I was a graduate student.

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• Before examining all of the available options,
  the decision was made to initiate the plan.
• Revised Before examining all of the available
  options, they decided to initiate the plan.

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• Our company prefers that organization more than
  their institute.
• Revised Our company prefers that organization
  more than their institute does.

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• The new company is as competitive, if not more
  competitive than, existing ones.
• Revised The new company is as competitive as,
  if not more competitive than, existing ones.

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• The proposed procedure corrects dimensional
  distortion and errors better.
• Revised The proposed procedure corrects
  dimensional distortion and errors better than
  conventional options.