Opinion Essays Famous Person Interview Feedback

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Opinion Essays Famous Person Interview Feedback
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Examples of The Conclusion Trick

• AG Known as the father of the Mona Lisa,
  Leonardo da Vinci was an amazing man.
• Conclusion trick Each time I see that curious
  smile on the Mona Lisas face I find myself drawn
  (pulled) again into the mystery of da Vinci.
• NOTE The idea of the conclusion trick is to
  remind readers of the attention getter that you
  used to start your essay. It gives the reader a
  sense of finality and completeness.

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Examples of The Conclusion Trick

• AG She was the seductive beauty known as the
  Queen of the Nile.
• Conclusion trick One hour would not be enough
  for all the questions I could ask the Queen of
  the Nile.

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Examples of The Conclusion Trick

• AG The mouse, the iPod, the iMac, and the iPad
  are just some of his inventions.
• Conclusion So, as I click my mouse, change
  songs on my iPod and do a web search on my iPad,
  again I think of how great it would be to speak
  to Steve Jobs.

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Examples of questions turned into noun clauses

• STUDENT I would ask her did she believe in
  love? (grammatically incorrect)
• Was she ever in love? Did she consider herself
  beautiful? What fashion and beauty tips could
  she give me?
• TEACHER I would ask her if she believed in love
  and if she had ever been in love. I would like
  to know if she considered herself beautiful and
  would ask her if she could give me some fashion
  and beauty tips.

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Examples of Strong Topic Sentences That Repeat
Key Words from the Topic Question

• One reason that I would like to talk to Steve
  Jobs is to know how he found his passion in life.
• Another reason I would like to talk to Jobs is to
  obtain some insight regarding his great ideas.
• Lastly, I would chose to talk to Jobs over any
  other person in order to know his secrets to
  success.

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• One reason why I would like to talk to John
  Lennon is to ask him to discuss his ideas of
  peace and love.
• Another reason whiy I would talk to John Lennon
  is because of his amazing ability to write songs.
• Finally, I would be interested to know what John
  Lennon did to reach his enormous success.

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• First, I would chose to speak to Steve Jobs in
  order to ask him how he came up with so many
  great ideas.
• Next, I would love to be able to ask Jobs about
  some of his design secrets.
• Lastly, I would choose to speak to Jobs in order
  to gain insight into his masterful understanding
  of minimalism.