Exercise 13

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Exercise 13
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No.1

• (Worse) Conventional approaches offer an
  explanation of this phenomenon and providing
  alternative strategies to solve the problem.
• (Better) Conventional approaches explain this
  phenomenon and provide alternative strategies to
  solve the problem.

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Note 4.8

• Depending on the sentences context, alleviate,
  alter, modify, resolve, eliminate or eradicate
  can be used as alternatives to solve when the
  Chinese meaning is ??.
• Also, depending on the sentences context,
  limitation, restriction, constraint, or
  phenomenon can be used as an alternatives to
  problem when the Chinese meaning is ??.

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No.2

• (Worse) Their approach involves converting fuzzy
  data into crisp scores and to determine the
  ranking order of alternatives.
• (Better) Their approach converts fuzzy data into
  crisp scores and determines the ranking order of
  alternatives.

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No.3

• (Worse) Crisp scores are assigned to the selected
  conversion scale (fuzzy number) for the purpose
  of applying a fuzzy scoring method and
  normalization of the scores.
• (Better) Crisp scores are assigned to the
  selected conversion scale (fuzzy number) to
  apply a fuzzy scoring method and normalize the
  scores.

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Note 4.9

• Avoid wordiness by saying for or to instead of
  for the purpose of.

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No.4

• (Worse) The project concentrates mainly on
  reduction of the dependence between the sample
  mean and the sample standard deviation and that
  an efficient procedure capable of attaining the
  minimum quality loss is developed.
• (Better) The project concentrates mainly on
  reducing the dependence between the sample mean
  and the sample standard deviation and developing
  efficient procedure capable of attaining the
  minimum quality loss.

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No.5

• (Worse) The standard procedure is for all intents
  and purpose inefficient, impractical, and creates
  problems.
• (Better) The standard procedure is for all
  intents and purpose inefficient, impractical, and
  problematic.

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Note 4.9

• Omit the needless phrase such as for all intents
  and purposes since they do not add to the
  sentences overall meaning.

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No.6

• (Worse) Ullman 1989 not only used the Analysis
  of Means (ANOM) to study the mean response, but
  also a further extension of the ANOM was made to
  analyze dispersion effects.
• (Better) Ullman 1989 not only used the Analysis
  of Means (ANOM) to study the mean response, but
  also further extended the ANOM to analyze
  dispersion effects.

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Note 4.11

• Depending on the sentences context, apply,
  employ, or utilize can be used as alternatives to
  use when the Chinese meaning is ??.
• Also, depending on the sentences context,
  investigate, examine, elucidate, or explore can
  be used as an alternatives to study when the
  Chinese meaning is ??.

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No.7

• (Worse) The Taguchi Method deals with a
  one-dimensional problem and multi-dimensional
  problems are handled by TOPSIS.
• (Better) The Taguchi Method deals with a
  one-dimensional problem and TOPSIS handles
  multi-dimensional problems.

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No.8

• (Worse) The calculations are performed either to
  get a revised least squares fit or expected
  failure times are estimated for the censored
  values.
• (Better) The calculations are performed either to
  get a revised least squares fit or to estimate
  expected failure times for the censored values.

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Note 4.12

• Depending on the sentences context, obtain,
  derive, or attain can be used as alternatives to
  get when the Chinese meaning is ??.

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No.9

• (Worse) The proposed optimization procedure is
  made up of the following steps
• Step 1 Transform the relative importance of each
  response into a fuzzy number.
• Step 2 Crisp scores must be assigned to selected
  conversion scale.
• Step 3 The quality loss is computed.
• Step 4 Determine the TOPSIS value for each
  trial.
• Step 5 The optimal factor/level combination must
  be determined.
• Step 6 The confirmation experiment is conducted.

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No.9 (cont.)

• (Batter) The proposed optimization procedure is
  made up of the following steps
• Step 1 Transform the relative importance of each
  response into a fuzzy number.
• Step 2 Assign crisp scores to selected
  conversion scale.
• Step 3 Computed the quality loss.
• Step 4 Determine the TOPSIS value for each
  trial.
• Step 5 Determine the optimal factor/level
  combination.
• Step 6 Conduct the confirmation experiment.

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Note 4.13

• Depending on the sentences context, consist of
  or comprised of can be used as alternatives to is
  made up of or is made of when the Chinese meaning
  is ???.

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No.10

• (Worse) Wee 11 made a further extension of the
  conventional model to allow for shortages and
  assuming that the demand rate would decrease
  exponentially.
• (Better) Wee 11 further extended the
  conventional model to allow for shortages and
  assumed that the demand rate would decrease
  exponentially.

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No.11

• (Worse) The relative closeness computed in TOPSIS
  can be used to assess the performance measurement
  and optimizing multi-response problems in the
  Taguchi method.
• (Better 1) The relative closeness computed in
  TOPSIS can be used to assess the performance
  measurement and optimize multi-response problems
  in the Taguchi method.

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No.11

• (Better 2) The relative closeness computed in
  TOPSIS can be used for assessing the performance
  measurement and optimizing multi-response
  problems in the Taguchi method.

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No.12

• (Worse) The experiment focused on determination
  of how process parameters affect the silicon
  nitride deposition process and to satisfy the
  industrial requirements.
• (Better) The experiment determine how process
  parameters affect the silicon nitride deposition
  process and, in doing so, satisfied the
  industrial requirements.