More effective writing.

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More effective writing.

• (How to express yourself in the written form in a
  creative, and extraordinarily, thought provoking,
  sagacious, and beguiling manner.)

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Write this down!

• Goal of the day to give each student direction,
  and specific ways, as to how they can make their
  writing more effective.

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Step 1 Get into A/B partners

• Determine who will be A and who will be B
  through a way that utilizes a description.
  (Physical, colour)

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PARTNER A WILL SHARE FIRST

• Talk with your partner about what you know about
  effective writing. (you have 20 seconds)

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IT IS NOW TIME FOR PARTNER B TO SHARE

• Talk with your partner about what you know about
  effective writing, that partner A did not
  already mention. (you have 15 seconds)

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Sharing of Ideas

• All A partners, stand up.
• Select a representative from your group.
• Repeat process for the B partners.
• Who sits down?
• ROCK/PAPER/SCISSORS

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• From those sitting, any volunteers to write on
  the board?
• List all the ideas on the board

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A Narrative Paragraph

• Yesterday evening was busy. I got home at 6
  oclock. My wife had prepared dinner, which we
  ate immediately. After eating, I played with my
  kids for about an hour. Then I started doing some
  work while my wife got the little ones ready for
  bed. Around 8 oclock I read my daughter her
  bedtime stories. Then I finished off the evening
  by doing some marking. What an exhausting night!

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What could be improved on?

• Partner B tell partner A what you think could
  be improved on (think back to the rubric you have
  seen in class)
• A tell B
• REPORT OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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What was done well?

• Partner B tell partner A what you think was
  done well (think back to the writing rubric).
• A tell B
• REPORT OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Improving your writing tip 1Effective Intros
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Why paragraph Why I hate Cell Phones!

• A Vanilla Introductory sentence
• Write this down!
• I hate cell phones.
• How could this be spiced up?
• A/B talk

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How to spice up that intro

• Option 1.
• Think of other words than hate, that express
  the same idea, (distain, loath, resent) and use
  that more interesting word.
• Write this down!
• I loath cell phones.

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Cell phones are sending us to a world of mind
numbing solitude.

• Option 2.
• Express the same idea of hating cell phones in
  a strong way that appeals to the readers
  emotions.
• These statements may shock the reader due to
  the bold stance you take.
• Write this down
• Ex. Cell phones are the bane of modern society.

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Improving your writing tip 2Use interesting
words.

• Write this down
• These phones isolate us.
• SPICE IT UP!
• A/B Talk

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• Option 1.
• Use interesting synonyms to avoid repeating
  words. (Phones was said in the intro, and the
  first body paragraph.)
• Ex. Devices, tools, gadgets, electronic devices
• Write this down
• These gadgets isolate us.

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• Option 2.
• Use interesting adjectives to add emotion and
  impact.
• Ex. Evil, supposedly helpful, soul snatching..
• Write this down
• These supposedly helpful, soul snatching gadgets
  isolate us.

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Version 1

• I hate cell phones. These phones isolate us.
  When you sit on the bus texting, or talking to
  someone, you dont ever interact with the people
  around you. People can access you at all times,
  so you are at the mercy of those who call. Cells
  also are a pain to everyone forced to be around
  them, because the noisy ring-tones are annoying.
  Cell phones are a serious nightmare.

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Version 2

• Cell phones are the bane of modern society.
  These supposedly helpful atrocities isolate us to
  the point where people will sit next to someone
  on a bus, oblivious to their existence, texting
  to someone who is just as equally ignoring
  another real live person. These soul snatching
  gadgets are contributing to our downward spiral
  toward a living nightmare by giving people
  instant access to us at all times. Having
  someone interrupt a live conversation by
  checking, or answering, their phone is rude, and
  can be likened to a kick to the groin after being
  turned down for a date. The message being sent
  is that you are unimportant You are so
  unimportant in fact, that a call from Operator
  32178234576 representing the Acme Button Company
  takes precedence over you. Cells also are a
  nuisance to everyone unlucky enough to be within
  2 city blocks of them. The noisy, and more often
  than not, irritating, ring-tones are distracting
  and vexatious. Cell phones are a serious
  nightmare in an otherwise dream-like world!