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The Paragraph
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Topic Sentence
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Develop your topic sentences by using main points
and examples Cuyamaca College is an excellent
choice for many students.

• Save Money (Main Point 1)
• Students at Cuyamaca College save a lot of money
  because of low tuition, easy access to financial
  aid programs, and free tutoring services.
• Get the classes they need (Main Point 2)
• If you are a student at Cuyamaca, you wont have
  to worry about getting the classes you need.
• Enjoy the benefits of close teacher relations
  (Main Point 3)
• Small class size and professor office hours
  ensure excellent teacher-student relations.
  

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Develop your topic sentences with specific
details dont be repetitious

• How would you make the following paragraph more
  detailed?
• The food at the cafeteria caused several of the
  students to become ill. One girl felt sick after
  eating some casserole. A boy felt dizzy after
  eating some casserole. Another student had a more
  stomach after trying some meat.

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Some Tips to Add Details

• Give people names
• Use adjectives like color, size, shape, weight,
  texture, taste and smell
• Make a word picture

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Would you do things differently?

• How would you make the following paragraph more
  detailed?
• The food at the cafeteria caused several of the
  students to become ill. One girl felt sick after
  eating some casserole. A boy felt dizzy after
  smelling the pasta. Another student had a sore
  stomach after trying to eat some meat.

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Heres a good example of good details

• The food at the cafeteria caused several
  students to become ill. First of all, Mary Brant
  suffered severe cramps and diarrhea five minutes
  after tasting the orange brick of casseroled tuna
  flakes. Then Brandon May fell and cut open his
  head on a table corner. He wasnt being clumsy
  he suffered an attack of nausea and dizziness
  after smelling the tray of runny green spaghetti
  surprise. Finally, Brad MacKenzie had to be
  rushed to the hospital when he began projectile
  vomiting after trying the fuzzy gray mystery meat
  called College Loaf.