Formal Writing Review

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Formal Writing Assignment 2

• Instructional technology

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Quality Topic Sentences

• Short SweetSchools need to incorporate
  technology into their courses. (Jennifer Lopez)
• Strong vocabSchools should modernize with the
  many advances in technology for a more
  comprehensive education. (Joey Abrams)
• Good use of Introductory PhraseIn order to
  prepare students for the technologically advanced
  world, effective modifications to curriculum must
  be made by school districts. (Alexys Calabro)

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More Quality Topic sentences

• Clever ThinkingInstead of just being
  incorporated, technology should have a purpose in
  education. (Kevin Michael)
• Creative WordingBlending modern technology with
  standard education will prepare young scholars
  for their futures. (Samantha Scherr)

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Transition Use Review

• Transition Placement Move them around!
• For example, students OR Students, for
  example,
• Avoiding the Cookbook transitions
• First of all, students canFurthermore, they can
  do greatFinally, students canIn conclusion,
  these are all

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Using Transitions effectively

• Students, for example, should replace their
  obsolete notebooks with laptops and tablets in
  the classroom. (Elmer Harbison)
• In many schools, for instance, computer labs are
  using out of date computers. (Matt Delano)
• If more students were equipped with a stronger
  skill set, however, it would help them in the job
  market tremendously.

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The Bridge

• Instead of a transition, use a transitional
  sentence.
• Some student examples
• These same lessons also apply to students.
  (Anthony Dowling)
• Use similar phrasing to connect points.

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Introducing examples

• Examples need to be introduced less casually and
  less obviously.
• Some weak examples
• Say a student fails a test. (too casual)
• Another example is when students (too obvious)
• A student might do bad in class and get a 77.
  (random and too hypothetical)

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More mature example delivery

• Some positive student examples
• Without failure, a student can never learn the
  key to success. (Brooke Applegate)
• For an athlete, failure can cause them to want to
  win even more. (Taylor Carton)
• Far too often, students feel that asking
  questions is a sign of weakness however, it
  portrays that they genuinely care about their
  success. (Sarah Valentine)
• Equally important, high school students must
  become responsible before graduating. (Samantha
  Thurman)

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Paragraph closers

• The closing sentence should never SUMMARIZE. It
  should be CONCLUSIVE, not CONCLUSIONY.
• Overall, failure teaches more than success does.
  (summarizing)
• This is a lesson in how failure teaches many
  people how to succeed. (summarizing obvious)
• These are only a few of the many skills and
  traits high school students should obtain. (too
  obvious)
• High School students should be adaptable,
  open-minded, and avoid procrastinating. (3
  examples are merely listed)
• Effective closers
• Perhaps
• When high school students recognize the
  importance of developing strong character,
  perhaps they will accomplish their goals in the
  future. (Kelli Scerbo)

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Other things to avoid

• Avoid using you or one. Instead, use other
  3rd person words, such as students, future
  scholars, etc.
• Quotations
• Less is more They would, for instance, know
  that for the next time they would need to put
  more effort.
• Contractions other formal rules

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Assignment 2

• During IT thus far, we have discussed time
  management, organization, learning styles, and
  active listening. All of these topics have
  something to do with maturity and self-awareness
  for the high school student.
• Based on these discussions and any relevant
  points of your own, how can high school students
  become more effective learners?
• Pre-writing Reflect on some of things that have
  made an impression on you (in IT class, or your
  other classes as well).