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Have a I told the reader the purpose of my document?
to provide information?
to propose a course of action?
to summarize a document?
to solve a problem?
5 Content, cont.
Is my message clear to my reader?
Have I included all I know, and researched any potential questions?
Are my ideas organized by their relevance to my position?
Do my main ideas stand out?
Have I kept my paragraphs to one idea each?
Are my transitions smooth?
6 Understanding the Reader
Who is my reader? How should I tailor my writing?
Internal vs. external audiences
The readers familiarity with the topic
The readers attitude toward the topic
The readers style and tone expectations
Removing bias and attitude from your writing
7 Content
Unified paragraphs
Incorporation offers many benefits for a business and its owners. For example, owners are not responsible for the businesss debts. Investors hope to make money when they buy a stock in a corporation. Incorporation also enables a business to obtain professional management skills. Corporations are subject to more governmental regulation than other forms of organization.
8 Content
Transitions and paragraph structure
Begin with your conclusion and offer support (deductive organization)
Use transitional phrases and words
Repeat certain key phrases for emphasis and transition
Limit paragraphs to 4-5 sentences
9 Content
Paragraph structure
Topic sentence main idea
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Concluding or transitional sentence
Exercise 3-2
10 Conciseness
Edit for unnecessary words
Due to the fact that because
In advance of before
Along the lines of like
At this point in time now
11 Conciseness
To stay informed on the latest information, analysts must read a great number of published materials about finance
12 Conciseness
To stay current, analysts must read many finance publications
13 Conciseness
For the sake of our cost reduction goals, we changed the way we ordered equipment
14 Conciseness
To reduce costs, we changed the way we ordered equipment
15 Conciseness
There are several planning strategies that we can use to reduce our income taxes
16 Conciseness
We can reduce our income taxes by using several different planning strategies
17 Conciseness
In spite of the fact that our costs rose by 10 percent, we still were able to keep our prices stable
18 Conciseness
Although costs rose by 10 percent, our prices remained stable
19 Conciseness
Ultimate consumer means a person or group of persons, generally constituting a domestic household, who purchase eggs generally at the individual stores of retailers or purchase and receive deliveries of eggs at the place of abode of the individual or domestic household from producers or retail route sellers and who use such eggs for the consumption as food.
20 Conciseness
Ultimate consumers are people who buy eggs to eat them
21 Conciseness
Wheres the verb?
One of the fastest ways to add conciseness is to search for your verb and ask yourself whether youve got a verb or a verb phrase
22 Conciseness
We made an analysis of ways to cut costs
We analyzed ways to cut costs
We are able to make the determination of the cost of an asset due to the fact that we have records of its purchase
We can determine an assets cost because we have purchase records
23 Conciseness
Inaccurate or awkward use of words
Our advertising expense, which is 1 percent of total sales in a negligent/negligible amount
This memo will discuss how to account for the theft of the filling station.
This memo will discuss how to account for the robbery at the filling station
24 Conciseness
Awkward word use
By using the net present value method, the chances of accepting a poor investment are reduced.
Use of the net present value method reduces the chances of accepting a poor investment
25 Conciseness
Avoid the passive always use active verbs
Corporate income taxes were raised by 15 by the current administration The current administration raised corporate taxes by 15
It was decided by management that work hours would increase by 10 Management decided to increase work hours by 10.
26 Conciseness
Avoid big words
endeavor try
interface with work with
utilize use
List of better word choices
27 Conciseness
Avoid jargon
Spell out acronyms in first use
Use words with precision
Use words you know
28 Grammar
The road signs you give a reader to help navigate your thoughts and words
Fragments
To measure the yield correctly
For example, all the employees who are eligible for retirement
29 Grammar
When to use commas
Two independent clauses (each with a verb and noun) are connected with a semi-colon
Or, connected with a conjunction (and, but, etc) which is preceded by a comma
30 Grammar
Commas
In a series of three things, there is only a comma between the first two
I like apples, oranges and tangerines
31 Grammar
Independent clauses and dependent clauses are connected with a comma
I went to the store, which was down the street.
The dress she wore, which was blue, was very striking on her.
Of all the gin joints in the world, this one served the best martinis
32 Grammar
Run on sentences when independent thoughts are connected with no punctuation
Discounted cash flow techniques are not used by all companies however, they are popular in large corporations.
33 Grammar
Parallel structure grammatical equality in verbs, nouns, pronouns, etc.
This report will discuss the computers features, how much it costs and its disadvantages.
This report will discuss the computers features, costs and disadvantages.
34 Grammar
We recommend the following procedures
Hire a consultant to help us determine our needs
Investigate alternative makes and models of equipment
We should then set up a pilot program to assess retraining needs for employees who will use the new equipment.
(Grammar exercises)
35 Grammar
Buy a style guide
MLA as well as Strunk and White Elements of Style
MLA for citations and bibliographies
Strunk and White is great for sentence and paragraph construction
36 Grammar
Watch for
Sentence fragments
Run-on sentences
Misuse of clauses
Parallel construction
Apostrophes and plurals
Quotations
spelling
37 Format and Design
Does it look inviting?
Use white space liberally
Use graphics for emphasis. Dont clutter
Bullets help people move through information
Vary font and size for importance
Use call outs to highlight critical information
38 Format and Design
Properly cite and footnote your references
Follow MLA style
Use proper citing for electronic vs. printed texts both in bibliography and in-text
Ex. For web reference (basic)
Gesterland, Richard. Worldbiz.com Page. Retrieved 1 May 2001
Refer to MLA website at mla.org for directions
39 Most Common Mistakes
Its and its
Whose and whos
Which and that
Affect and effect
Who and whom
Verb tense
Active verbs
Buzzwords
Too many words
Possessives and plurals
Using quotation marks
Using and instead of to
Using of instead of have
Top heavy sentences
40 What to use?
Its a nice day (it is) vs. Its hair was red (possessive)
Whose house is it (possessive) vs. Whos going? (who is)
The weather will affect us (verb) vs. The weather has an effect (noun).
Buy the dress that is red and white (specific to the object) vs. She wore a lovely dress, which was red and white (not critical to the object)
To whom are you speaking (follows a pronoun) vs. Who is at the door? (no pronoun implied)
41 Easily confused words
Allusion/illusion
Beside/besides
Bimonthly/semi-monthly
Concurrent/consecutive
Discreet/discrete
Principle/principal
Desert/dessert
There/theyre/their
42 The preposition thing
Try and come to my party vs. Try to come to my party
You should of seen her face vs. You should have seen her face.
43 Verbs
Subject and tense agreement
That analyst works hard vs. Two analysts work hard
Sales dropped by 20 last year. That drop is the result of increased competition. (shift from past to present tense)
44 Top heavy sentences
Keep the noun and verb as close together as you can
The dog, overcome with a sense of futility at the unfairness of life, and miserable at the inattention of her master, chased the ball.
The dog chased the ball, even though she was overcome with a sense of futility at the unfairness of life and the inattention of her master.
45 Buzzwords
Eliminate them!
maximized systems of strategic environmental processes.
Analysis and validation of support strategies for customer satisfaction parameters