Analysis of

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Analysis of Student Work
Analysis of Student Work
Details plus the use of previous learning of
procedural writing incorporated into the
narrative piece (soon after, at the very end)
Elaborates with a number of supporting details
(I was super nervous because, I felt proud when)
Writers voice apparent (personality on paper!)

Evidence of a plan the purpose is evident.
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Commentary for the Student Glow/Strength
Commentary for the Student Grow/Need
Your supporting details helped create a picture
in your readers mind. (we had to kneel on one
knee.)
Adding dialogue to your story would help to bring
your characters to life and add even more
excitement to an already exciting piece.
Your use of strong verbs (practiced, skipped,
sneaked zoomed,) makes your character come alive
and brings your personality out in your piece.
Your varied transition words and phrases help
move your reader through your piece.