Impact Essay- Organization

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Impact Essay- Organization

• Organization is the structure, the thread of
  central meaning, the logical pattern of the ideas
  within a piece pf writing

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Notes on Organization

• My beginning catches the readers attention and
  knows what I will be discussing
• Transitions effectively connect my ideas
• The order is logical and effective
  (chronological)
• My title is connected to the theme of the writing
• Ive chosen an appropriate conclusion

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Tip 1 for success in organization

• YOU ALWAYS WANT TO GRAB YOUR READERS
  ATTENTIONIF THEY READ THE FIRST SENTENCE AND
  THEY DO NOT WANT TO READ ON, THERE IS A PROBLEM!
• THE FIRST SENTENCE IN YOUR INTRODUCTION IS CALLED
  THE GRABBER FOR A REASON!!!!!!
• BUT WHAT ARE WAYS TO GRAB YOUR AUDIENCE???

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ONE WAY TO GRAB YOUR AUDIENCE

• START WITH A QUOTE
• "Music is a moral law. It gives soul to the
  universe, wings to the mind, flight to the
  imagination, a charm to sadness, gaiety and life
  to everything. It is the essence of order and
  lends to all that is good and just and
  beautiful. Plato

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OTHER WAYS

• You could find an interesting fact
• Students who play a musical instrument are more
  likely to succeed in Math and Science.
• Ask an interesting question
• Did you know that 87 of middle school students
  listen to music an average of three hours daily?
• How many hours do you listen to music daily?

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Tip 2 for success in Organization

• Transitions effectively connect my ideas
• If my paper is about my family, one of my body
  paragraphs is about how my brother and I are NOT
  close and then my second body paragraph is about
  how my sister and I are close. What close a
  transition be from body paragraph one to two?
• I could say, Although my brother and I are NOT
  close, Im closest to my sister,

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Transitions are the GLUE that connects one
paragraph to the next

• Lets try another oneIf my paper is about my two
  dogs.
• One body paragraph is about how my dog Peanut is
  energetic
• The other body paragraph is about how my dog
  Gizmo is calm
• What could a transition statement say from body
  paragraph one to two??? Talk to your group
  members and make a statement to connect the two
• Suggestion- While Peanut is crazy, Gizmo is
  mellow.
• Suggestion- Although my first dog is energetic,
  my second dog, Gizmo is as calm as can be.

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Tip 3 for success in Organization

• The order is logical and effective
  (chronological)
• If my paper is about my first day of school, what
  makes sense to start with
• A.) Getting and doing my first night of homework.
• B.) Meeting my teachers and loving them
  instantly!
• C.) The morning nerves about what school is like

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Lets do another example

• Put the following in the order it makes most
  sense
• HOW TO MAKE A GRILLED CHEESE SANDWICH
• A.) Put the sandwich one the pan and flip each
  side after a few minutes
• B.) Take out two pieces of bread, a slice of
  cheese and butter
• C.) While eating my grilled cheese sandwich, I
  realized I love grilled cheese sandwiches!!!!
• D.) Spread butter thinly on both slices of bread
• E.) When both sides of the bread are golden brown
  from the pan and the cheese is melted, the
  grilled cheese sandwich is ready to eat!
• F.) Put Cheese on bread and close the sandwich up

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The order makes the most sense to be

• B.) Take out two pieces of bread, a slice of
  cheese and butter
• D.) Spread butter thinly on both slices of bread
• F.) Put Cheese on bread and close the sandwich up
• A.) Put the sandwich one the pan and flip each
  side after a few minutes
• E.) When both sides of the bread are golden brown
  from the pan and the cheese is melted, the
  grilled cheese sandwich is ready to eat!
• C.) While eating my grilled cheese sandwich, I
  realized I love grilled cheese sandwiches!!!!

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Next Tip My title is connected to the theme of
the writing

• What title could I give to a paper about how I
  broke my little finger while playing football
• Discuss with group ---the most creative title
  gets CANDY!!!
• What title could I give to a paper about my trip
  to Italy and I met the pope
• Discuss with group ---the most creative title
  gets CANDY!!!

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Next Tip.. Ive chosen an appropriate conclusion

• The purpose of a conclusion is NOT to repeat
  EVERYTHING you stated in your paper (BORING!!!!)
• The purpose is to restate the main idea and leave
  the reader with something to think of/ or be
  inspired by

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Bad conclusion

• In this paper, I have told you about my trip to
  Italy. I enjoyed seeing the statue of David. I
  also enjoyed hanging out with my husband while we
  took photos of Florence and Venice. My favorite
  part of the trip was bumping into the pope.

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Good conclusion

• Florence, Venice, Rome all these cities were
  amazing to see. However, the trip wouldnt have
  been so great had it not been for the memorable
  times I shared with my husband. It was nice to
  know that I had found my soul mate who I could
  explore the world with. Life is not the same
  unless you have someone to share it with.

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Now, let s read a picture book

• Focus on how its organized

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Lets score a few sample papers for Organization

• Remember
• 5 Mastery/ Strong
• 3 Developing
• 1 Beginning

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First Sample is titled, What are Good Qualities
of a Good Teacher.

• What would you rate it and why???
• They scored it a 3 because..
• Although it has an introduction, the conclusion
  does not tie up loose ends.
• Transitions are present, but boring and
  ineffective (first, second, etc.)
• Uninspired title
• The structure is confusing at times- loses its
  focus at times.

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Next Sample is titled, A Good Teacher.

• What would you rate it and why???
• They scored it a 5 because..
• Inviting introduction and the conclusion leaves
  the reader with a sense of closure
• Thoughtful transitions clearly show how ideas
  connect
• Sequence is logical and effective
• Okay title (could be more creative!!!)
• Organization flows so smoothly

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Last sample is To be a good Teacher

• What would you rate it and why???
• No real lead to set up what follows and no real
  end that wraps things up
• Lack of connect between ideas (no transitions)
• There is no sense of what is more important-
  sequencing needs lots of work!
• No title
• Pacing seems awkward
• Makes it hard to read because Organization
  structure is so unclear