GUIDED PEER EDITING

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GUIDED PEER EDITING
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PLEASE STAY WITH THIS POWERPOINT AS YOU EDIT.
DO NOT WORK AHEAD!
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RULES FOR PEER EDITING

• Work hard at editing the paper. - It will help
  both your partner AND you!
• Be truthful, but dont be mean! Give CONSTRUCTIVE
  CRITICISM!
• Celebrate the STRENGTHS of the paper - dont
  focus solely on weaknesses!

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WRITE ON THE DRAFT!
GREAT ANALYSIS!

• Mark directly on the draft

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TASK 1
READ THE PAPER!
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TITLE?

• Is there a creative title?
• If there is a boring title or no title at all,
  offer a suggestion.

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INTRODUCTION

• Does the paper begin with a generalization about
  life?
• Is the generalization explained further?
• This generalization should not mention the novel
  in anyway.
• After reading the explanation, are you clear on
  its meaning?

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THESIS STATEMENT

• Does it name the title, author, the
  generalization and a connection to the novel?
• Is the thesis clear and arguable? If so, place a
  ? next to the thesis. If not, place a ? and make
  a comment on the draft that explains the problem.

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Quote

• Is there a quote from the book after the thesis
  that further explains the generalization?
• Is the quote blended and tagged?
• If so, place a ? next to it
• If not, place a ? next to it and write them a
  message in the margin telling them what they are
  missing

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Introduction Continued

• Is the paper written in present tense and 3rd
  person? Make a note to the author to change any
  past tense verbs and to avoid using 1st and 2nd
  person pronouns
• You should not find any words like you, your, me,
  I, us, or we. If you do, circle them and tell
  the author to change them!

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Situation 1 Transition Sentence

• The second paragraph should begin with a
  transition sentence. It should not start just
  giving background information from the novel.
  Underline the transition sentence.
• The transition should tie the first situation to
  the thesis so the reader understands the
  connection. If you can see the connection
  between the situation and the thesis, place a ?
  next to the transition.
• If you cannot, indicate that to the author!

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Situation 1 Background Information

• Draw a squiggly line around the background
• Does the author give enough background
  information ( without summarizing) for the 1st
  situation? If it reads like summary, place a sad
  face next to the background. If it reads like
  necessary background, place a happy face next to
  the background.

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Situation 1Quote

• After the background the author should offer a
  quote as proof of his or her thesis.
• Underline this quote
• Is there a clear connection between the quote and
  the thesis? If so place a ? next to the quote.
  If not place a ? next to the quote.

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Situation 1 QUOTE INCORPORATION

• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTE IS PROPERLY
  INCORPORATED INTO THE AUTHORS WRITING.
• Place a number next to the quote if it
• 1. USES A DIALOGUE TAG
• 2 USES AN -ING DIALOGUE TAG
• 3. SIGNIFICANT WORDS ARE WOVEN
• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTES ARE PROPERLY
  PUNCTUATED AND DOCUMENTED.
• Example Finny says, I have suffered (103).

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OH NO! A NAKED QUOTE?!?
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Situation 1 - ANALYSIS

• Find the spot in the paragraph where the writer
  begins his/her in-depth analysis of the 1st
  situation.
• Circle this chunk of analysis.
• Is this analysis developed with several relevant
  ideas?
• If not, put a ? next to the chunk.
• If it is well developed, put a ? next to the
  analysis.
• Check to see that the analysis makes up 1/2 to
  2/3 of the paragraph. It should! Tell the
  author if it doesnt.

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GIVE A SUGGESTION AS TO HOW TO FURTHER ANALYZE
THE SCENE.

• How do I do help the writer analyze further? Ask
  yourself these questions
• Why does the character do what he/she does? Why
  does the character say what he/she says?
• What about the characters background might
  influence the decisions, actions, or words shown
  in the situation?
• Does the character have a personal agenda or
  motive?
• How does the character feel about the other
  characters in the scene?

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Situation 2
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Situation 2 TRANSITION

• Does the second situation begin with a transition
  that links the first situation to the second
  situation and to the thesis? If yes, underline
  the transition and put a happy face next to it.
• EXAMPLE Not only does Captain Keller show a
  domineering attitude toward his wife, but he also
  acts similarly toward Annie.
• If there is no transition, make a note of it on
  the draft.

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Situation 2 Background Information

• Draw a squiggly line around the background
• Does the author give enough background
  information (without summarizing) for the 2nd
  situation? If it reads like summary, place a ?
  next to the background. If it reads like
  necessary background, place a ? next to the
  background.

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Situation 2 QUOTE

• After the background the author should offer a
  quote as proof of his or her thesis.
• Underline this quote
• Is there a clear connection between the quote and
  the thesis? If so, place a ? next to the quote.
  If not, place a ? next to the quote.

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Situation 2 QUOTE INCORPORATION

• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTE IS PROPERLY
  INCORPORATED INTO THE AUTHORS WRITING.
• Place a number next to the quote if it
• 1. USES A DIALOGUE TAG
• 2 USES AN -ING DIALOGUE TAG
• 3. SIGNIFICANT WORDS ARE WOVEN
• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTES ARE PROPERLY
  PUNCTUATED AND DOCUMENTED.
• Example Finny says, I have suffered (103).

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Situation 2 ANALYSIS

• Find the spot in the paragraph where the writer
  begins his/her in-depth analysis of the 2nd
  situation.
• Circle this chunk of analysis.
• Is this analysis developed with several relevant
  ideas?
• If not, put a ? next to the chunk.
• If it is well developed, put a ? next to the
  analysis.
• Check to see that the analysis makes up 1/2 to
  2/3 of the paragraph. It should! Tell the
  author if it doesnt.

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Situation 3
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Situation 3 TRANSITION

• Does the third situation begin with a transition
  that links the second situation to the third
  situation and to the thesis? If yes, underline
  the transition and put a happy face next to it.
• EXAMPLE Not only does Captain Keller show a
  domineering attitude toward his wife, but he also
  acts similarly toward Annie.
• If there is no transition, make a note of it on
  the draft.

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Situation 3 Background Information

• Draw a squiggly line around the background
• Does the author give enough background
  information (without summarizing) for the 3rd
  situation? If it reads like summary, place a ?
  next to the background. If it reads like
  necessary background, place a ? next to the
  background.

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Situation 3 QUOTE

• After the background, the author should offer a
  quote as proof of his or her thesis.
• Underline this quote
• Is there a clear connection between the quote and
  the thesis? If so, place a ? next to the quote.
  If not, place a ? next to the quote.

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Situation 3 QUOTE INCORPORATION

• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTE IS PROPERLY
  INCORPORATED INTO THE AUTHORS WRITING.
• Place a number next to the quote if it
• 1. USES A DIALOGUE TAG
• 2 USES AN -ING DIALOGUE TAG
• 3. SIGNIFICANT WORDS ARE WOVEN
• NOW CHECK TO SEE THAT THE QUOTES ARE PROPERLY
  PUNCTUATED AND DOCUMENTED.
• Example Finny says, I have suffered (103).

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Situation 3 ANALYSIS

• Find the spot in the paragraph where the writer
  begins his/her in-depth analysis of the 3rd
  situation.
• Circle this chunk of analysis.
• Is this analysis developed with several relevant
  ideas?
• If not, put a ? next to the chunk.
• If it is well developed, put a ? next to the
  analysis.
• Check to see that the analysis makes up 1/2 to
  2/3 of the paragraph. It should! Tell the
  author if it doesnt.

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Conclusion

• Does this paragraph begin with a connection to
  life outside the novel?
• Does the author tie back to the generalization
  and the thesis and expand on them?
• Does the author address a new and thoughtful
  conclusion based on the analysis that they came
  up with?
• Does the writer offer you something to think
  about?
• Do you feel the author has been successful in
  proving his or her thesis in a creative and well
  constructed essay? Make a comment at the end.

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CONVENTIONS

• Are there major spelling, grammar, and
  punctuation errors or habits that make the paper
  difficult to read?
• If so, comment on these on the draft.
• Does the author consistently write in present
  tense, bracketing quotes when necessary?
• Does the author consistently write in third
  person, avoiding all forms of I and you?

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REMEMBER...

• Use your own judgment when you revise your paper.
  
• THIS IS YOUR PAPER!
• If you do not agree with your editor, do not make
  the suggested change.
• FOLLOW YOUR GUT INSTINCT!

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