Task 2 Childhood Memories Effective sentences: coordination

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Task 2 Childhood MemoriesEffective sentences
coordination subordinationFall semester, 2007
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• Free writing
• Review Narration
• Coordination subordination
• Activity 1 practicing
• Brainstorming childhood memories
• Planning/outlining
• Reading samples
• Reading from your peers
• Summary homework

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Free Writing

• Free writing is a simple process that is the
  basis for other discovery techniques. Basic free
  writing follows these guidelines
• Write nonstop for a set period of time (1020
  minutes).
• Do not make corrections as you write.
• Keep writing, even if you have to write something
  like, "I don't know what to write."
• Write whatever comes into your mind.
• Do not judge or censor (examine) what you are
  writing.

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• The point of doing free writing is the process,
  not the end result. If you follow the guidelines,
  your free writing is successful.
• Free writing has these benefits
• It makes you more comfortable with the act of
  writing.
• It helps you bypass (ignore) the "inner critic"
  who tells you that you can't write.
• It can be a valve(??) to release inner tensions.
• It can help you discover things to write about.
• It can indirectly improve your formal writing.
• It can be fun.

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• Some suggestions for free writing
• Use the writing tool that is most comfortable for
  you pencil, computer, or whatever.
• Don't cross anything out Write the new idea
  down leave the old one.
• Drop all punctuation. That can make your free
  writing faster and more fluent.
• Don't worry about spelling or grammar, or even
  finding the right word, just write down your
  thoughts about a topic without stopping for the
  time you've allowed yourself.
• Focus on meaning.
• Principle of free writing the more, the better.

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An Example of Free Writing

• well I'm sitting here at the key board and I
  really don't know what to write about it is too
  chilly in this building today age after we
  complained all summe about it being too hot -
  remind myself not to correct errors it's second
  nature to go back and change mistales mabee i
  should have written this example in long hand but
  then i 'd have to translate my hadnwriting I
  don't know how to wirt ehte link for the Shiki
  list renga I want ot constribute a link if I can
  I saw a bumblebee in sweet pea blossoms this
  morning and i think that would work bery well as
  an image but i havent got it worked out well i
  don't know how the bee relates to the blossoms is
  he hiding in them? is he . . . is he . . . is he
  . . . making a home there, no of course not bees
  don't live in blossoms and he's not hiding
  either

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Review narration

• Essential elements of narration
• Events
• Narrator
• purpose
• How to write a personal experience narrative
  (tips)
• Topic sentence, which tells the central idea and
  reveals the purpose of your narrative.
• Use the first person point of view.
• Chronological order.
• Select only those details that serve your
  purpose.
• Transitions such as shortly, afterward, later,
  soon, etc. to move the story along.
• What to write about (ordinary experiences)

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Task 2 Childhood Memories

• Coordination Subordination
• Two methods to express two or more than two ideas
  in one sentence
• Coordination
• Subordination

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Coordination

• Combining two or more ideas in one sentence to
  create equal emphasis.
• Ways to coordinate (to place in the same order,
  class, or rank.) words and phrases
• Joining them with a coordinating conjunction or a
  pair of correlative conjunctions
• He does not like reading or singing.
• A university has no real existence and no real
  purpose
• The business of the college is not only to train
  you, but (also) to put you in touch with

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• Expressing them in the same kind of grammatical
  construction.
• You have no time for Shakespeare, for a basic
  look at philosophy, for the continuity of the
  fine arts, for that lesson of mans development
  (for-prepositional phrases)

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• Ways to coordinate clauses
• Joining them with a comma and a coordinating
  conjunction
• He is a worker, and I am a teacher.
• The weather is rather hot, so he goes to the
  swimming pool.
• Fourteen years later I am still teaching, and I
  am here to tell you

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• Joining them with a semicolon (), which is often
  accompanied by a conjunctive adverb or by a
  transitional phrase.
• The trip was not very well planned or prepared
  therefore, it was not a pleasant one.
• The invention brought him fame moreover, it
  brought him money.
• Wear something simple for example, a skirt and
  blouse.

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Subordination

• Combining two or more ideas in one sentence to
  create unequal emphasis.
• To give unequal emphasis to two or more ideas,
  you express the major idea in an independent
  clause and express minor ideas in
• subordinate clauses.
• phrases or single words.

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• Subordinate clauses, introduced by subordinating
  conjunctions or by relative pronouns
• The policemen were leaving when they heard some
  noise in the next room.
• Though the weather is cold and rainy here,
  sometimes it is warm and sunny.
• Each item () I found brought in a whole nickel
  at Kellys Corner Store.

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• Phrases or single words.
• The professor walked into the classroom, carrying
  a bag of books with him.
• The professor walked into the classroom, a bag of
  books under his arm.

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• Why coordination and subordination?
• Emphasis
• Effective sentence

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Activity 1 pair/group work

• Identify coordination and subordination and point
  out how coordination or subordination is achieved
  in each sentence.
• Correct faulty coordination or subordination in
  the following sentences.

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Childhood Memories

• Brainstorm the unforgettable things in your
  childhood memories.
• Did you learn anything from your father? What?
• Did you earn money by yourself when you were a
  boy/girl? How did you earn it?

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• Reading sample A Lesson from My Father.
• Individual work read the selection.
• Pair/group work discuss the questions on page
  15.
• Presentation.
• Reading sample Hard-Earned Money
• Who is the narrator?
• What is the purpose of the opening paragraph?
• What money-earning methods did the narrator use?
• Does she give equal importance to her
  money-earning methods?
• What is the theme/thesis of the writing?

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Writing Assignment 2

• Write about one of your childhood memories
  in about 200 words.
• Brainstorm what to write about.
• Planning/outlining (see the format on p.20)
• Group discussion on your plans.
• Reading from your peers to learn how to write
  your personal experience narratives.
• My First Experience with Death
• My First Part-Time Job
• Revising your plans.

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• Summary
• Online resources
• Dreamers Blog http//www.zhuoqun.net/article.asp
  ?id617
• Advice on Academic Writing http//www.utoronto.ca
  /writing/advise.html
• ESL Writing http//iteslj.org/links/ESL/Writing
  /
• Academic Writer http//vlc.polyu.edu.hk/academicw
  riter/Questions/writemodeintro.htm
• The Writing Center http//www.wisc.edu/writing/
• Online Writing Lab http//owl.english.purdue.edu/
  oldindex.html
• Homework
• Writing your first draft.
• Revising
• Peer evaluation