Hollywoodland

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Hollywoodland

• Proofreading
• RLS 2007

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• YouTube Introduction

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The dead man is George Reeves, 83. find in his
bedroom shot through the head on the night of 16
June 1959

• Who found the body of George Reeves
• The dead man is George Reeves, (who was )
  ________
• Replace find with found

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84. Reeves was an actor who enjoyed brief spell
of fame during85. the nineteen-fifty when he
played TVs Superman. Though loved by young

• Because of the word during, we know he did not
  play Superman for only one year (1950).
• He played Superman for a certain number of years
  during the decade.
• Replace nineteen-fifty with nineteen-fifties

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85. the nineteen-fifty when he played TVs
Superman. Though loved by young86. people, he
was too much closely identified with his TV role
and was unable 87. to make the break into movies

• Much is used with uncountable nouns.
• closely is an adverb.
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he was unable 87. to make the break into
movies that he longed for. Killing by his own
gun, he88. seemed

• by is a good indicator that there is a problem
  with killing
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he88. seemed another casualty on Hollywoods
avenue of broke dreams, and the89. police
recorded a verdict of suicidal.

• In other words, the dreams are ________
• Replace broke with broken

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and the89. police recorded a verdict of
suicidal.

• A verdict of noun
• Replace suicidal with suicide

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90. But was it really that? Corpse was still in
the morgue91. when stories of murder begun to
circulate around Hollywood Hills.

• This isnt the first time the corpse (dead body)
  has been mentioned.
• We need an article
• Add The in front of corpse.

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90. But was it really that? Corpse was still in
the morgue91. when stories of murder begun to
circulate around Hollywood Hills.

• Begun is the past participle of begin.
• We need the past tense.
• Replace begun with began.

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92. How come there were any fingerprints on the
gun? And how was it93. there were another bullet
holes in the floor and ceiling of the dead94.
mans room?

• You would expect George Reeves fingerprints to
  be on the gun if he really committed suicide.
• This purpose of this sentence is to explain why
  some people think that he didnt commit suicide.
• Add not between were and any.

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And how was it93. there were another bullet
holes in the floor and ceiling of the dead94.
mans room?

• Another singular
• Holes plural
• Ceiling floor
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of the dead94. mans room? Allen Coulters
feature film, wrote by Paul Bernbaum, 95.
retraces the fateful years proceding Reevess
death and looks at a 96. subsequent investigating

• Wrote is the past tense of write.
• By is a good indicator that we should not use
  the past tense here.
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Allen Coulters feature film, , 95. retraces
the fateful years proceding Reevess death and
looks at a 96. subsequent investigating that
suggests that somebody other than him97. may
pulled the trigger.

• precede verb T to be or go before something
  or someone in time or space
• proceed verb I 1 SLIGHTLY FORMAL to continue
  as planned
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and looks at a 96. subsequent investigating that
suggests that somebody other than him97. may
pulled the trigger.

• A adj noun
• A subsequent noun
• Replace investigating with investigation.

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98. Anyone goes to see Hollywoodland and
expects to see a99. fresh angle will very
disappointed.

• Anyone who goes

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98. Anyone goes to see Hollywoodland and
expects to see a99. fresh angle will very
disappointed. While it claims to come up with
new100. evidence,

• Disappointed is the feeling the film will give
  them.
• Think of the following structures They are
  frightened/They are surprised/ They are
  disappointed.
• Future tense
• Add be between will and very.

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While it claims to come up with new100.
evidence, in fact it shows nothing new. But about
another kinds of101. Hollywood death the slow
fade of a career, the evaporation of beautiful

• The writer mentions two kinds of Hollywood
  death.
• Replace another with other.

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But about another kinds of101. Hollywood death
the slow fade of a career, the evaporation of
beautiful ithas a lot to say.

• the slow fade of a career (noun)
• the evaporation of beautiful (adjective)
• Replace beautiful with beauty.