Title: The Journey
1The Journey
2Area of Study
- What is an Area of Study?
- In the HSC all students in the ESL, Standard and
Advanced course complete the same area of study
paper. All students in all courses focus on the
area journeys although they may be focusing on
a different aspect of the journey (ie. Inner,
physical, imaginative). - The AOS Journeys requires students to explore
the ways in which the concept of the journey is
considered and expressed in and through texts. In
their responses and compositions students
examine, question and reflect on - Their observation and understanding of the
portrayed events, people, ideas and societies
that they encounter in and through the prescribed
texts and texts of their own choosing related to
the Area of Study - The assumptions underlying the representations
of journeys - The ways in which they perceive the world
through texts and speculate about it - The ways they consider and express their own
journey experiences. -
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3Sections in the Area of Study
- There are three sections in the Area of Study.
These are - Section One In this section students will be
given a selection of previously unseen stimulus
material. Students will have to reply to a
series of short answer questions. - Section Two In this section students are
required to respond creatively to a stimulus.
This creative response can take the form a short
story, a letter, a journal entry or reflection. - Section Three In this section students will be
asked to use their core text, the stimulus
booklet and related material to respond to a
question on the theme of journeys. - All of these sections will be explored in
greater detail in this - power point presentation
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4Types of Journeys
- Physical
- Inner
- Imaginative
5Introduction to focus inner journeys
- Through this focus students explore the ways
in which texts depict journeys of the mind and
spirit. Inner journeys involve the exploration
of the self, as individuals review their growth
and development in the light of experiences which
challenge and inspire them. Students examine the
underlying assumptions about these inner journeys
and consider the power of the inner journey to
challenge their thinking. In their responding
and composing, students reflect on the ways these
inner journeys provide new insights and
understanding of the world and themselves.
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7Inner Journeys Synonyms
- Alternative words for Journey
- PASSAGE FLIGHT OUTING
- PILGRAMAGE TOUR
- MOVEMENT SAFARI
- WANDER RIDE MISSION
- JAUNT CROSSING TREK
- EXCURSION
- Alternative words for Inner
- INSIDE INTERIOR SECRET
- SPIRITUAL INNERMOST
- CENTRAL INTRINSIC
- PRIVATE INTIMATE HIDDEN
- NOT OBVIOUS INTERNAL
- PERSONAL
8Reflection
- Brainstorm
- What have you learned about journeys over the
past year? - Reflect
- What is a journey you have had in your own
life? - Which character/author we have studied has a
journey most similar to yours?
9Before we BeginCopy the following chart into
your notebooks and fill it in as we look at the
next few overheads. Use two A4 pages, so that you
can get all the information in.
10Obstacles to Journeys
- Societal Restraints
- Other Individuals
- Personal limitations (For example, ignorance,
denial of inner life, poor commitment). - What others can you come up with?
- Critical Reflection
- What obstacles have you faced to your own
journey? - What kind of obstacles did the characters/personas
in the stimulus booklet, your related material
and Life is Beautiful face?
11Forces that Initiate Journeys
- Maturation
- Internal desire
- External events
- Influences of other people
- Spirituality
- What others can you come up with?
- Critical Reflection
- What are the forces that have initiated journeys
in your own life? - What were the forces that initiated the journeys
of the characters/personas in the stimulus
booklet, your realted texts and Life is
Beautiful?
12Sources of Assistance
- Mentors
- Significant others
- Competitors
- Faith
- Belief in self
- The journey of others
- Can you think of any others?
- Critical Reflection
- What sources of assistance have you had in your
own journey? - What sources of assistance did the
characters/personas in the stimulus booklet text,
your related material and Life is Beautiful have?
13Nature of the Journey
- Linear
- Non-Linear
- Gradual
- Fast
- Continuous
- Spasmodic
- short
- What others can you come up with?
- Critical Reflection
- How could you describe the nature of journeys
that you have taken? - How could you describe the nature of the journeys
that the characters/ personas in the stimulus
booklet, your related texts and Life is Beautiful
have taken?
14Consequences of Journeys
- Changes in the individual- physically,
psychologically, intellectually - Changes in society eg. New collective knowledge
and lifestyle through discoveries, effect of
physical conquests - May provide inspiration for the journeys of others
15The Structure of the Journey Narrative
- All journey narratives share a basic structure
- Orientation
- The responder is introduced to the
character/persona and becomes aware of who they
are before they embark on their journey. - Complication
- Events and/or circumstances lead the
character/persona to embark on their journey. - Climax
- The character/persona of the text encounters
obstacles or discovers something new about their
journey. This is usually about 2/3 through the
text and is the turning point in their journey - Resolution
- The responder can see that the character/persona
has clearly been changed by their journey. This
new person can clearly be contrasted with the
persona/character that the responder was
introduced to in the orientation.
16Example of the Journey Narrative
17TaskPick two texts that we have studied in the
unit journeys and fill out the following chart in
order to determine what their journey narrative
is.
18Review
- A summary of what we have learned about the
concept of journeys so far - The Journey may be physical, inner or
imaginative, but it is usually a combination of
these. - The journey is almost always a quest for both
discovery and self-discovery. - Through the journey an individuals
understandings about their own gender, sexuality,
class, race, ethnicity, age, ability is changed - Journeys can give characters/personas/ourselves a
better understanding of our own position within
society and culture - Taking a journey often involves encountering and
overcoming obstacles. - There are always forces that initially initiate a
characters/personas/our own journey - There are always sources of assistance for
characters/persona's/our own journeys. - There are always consequences/a person always
changes through their journey. - Critical Reflection What new things have you
learned about the concept of journeys?
19Lets Take A Closer Look at Sections One, Two
and Threeof the Area of Study paper
20Section OneConsists of short answer replies to a
variety of unseen texts that take journeys as a
prominent theme
- In order to do well in this section you
should be obeying the following basic rules - 1.) Before you answer a question look at how many
points it is worth. A question that is only
worth one point generally only requires a one or
two sentence answer. A question that is worth 3
points will take you about a paragraph to answer
because you need to supply more information in
order to get the full three points. - 2.) Do not list techniques without explaining how
the composer uses them in order to shape meaning.
Anyone can list of a bunch of big words it is
knowing how to use them that will get you points.
Stick to the formula that we have gone over in
class (Technique Example Shapes Meaning). - 3.) Most questions are asking you to discuss
techniques even if they dont specifically
mention the word techniques in the wording of
the question.
21Section One Continued
- 4.) If the question asks you to discuss what
types of journeysare in a particular text, you
need to specifically mention what type of journey
the composer is talking about. For example,
physical, inner,or imaginative. - 5.) Know your techniques. Things like, the
composer uses paragraphs or the composer uses
sentences are not techniques. Techniques are
things like metaphor, symbol, formal language,
informal language, juxtaposition, etcetera
22ExamplesIn the following example answers
students forgot to follow some of our basic rules
(naughty students!). How could we use the basic
rules to make their answers better?
- Question The Composer uses a variety of
techniques to convey feelings about journeys.
Identify and explain two techniques used. (Two
points) - Answer The composer uses assonance in this text.
He also uses metaphors and similes. - Question What type of journey is the poem about?
(One point) - Answer The type of journey in the poem is a
physical journey. This is shown as the person in
the poem describes his physical actions and
things happening. It is also mental as the
person in the poem describes his feelings and
thoughts, for example as the ferry is leaving the
person are physically on a journey and it
mentally symbolizes the persons journey from a
small bay to a big city.
23Some Better Examples
- Question What type of Journey is this poem
about? (One Point) - Answer Grays poem shows a physical journey on
the ferry and an imaginative journey as he
reminisces about his life. - Question The composer uses a variety of
techniques to convey feelings about the journey.
Identify and explain two techniques used. (Two
points) - Answer The composer juxtaposes light and dark
imagery. For example, the longer white lights
feel nervously around in the blackness This
juxtaposition is used in order to emphasize the
search for light (understanding) in a dark
(confusing) world. Throughout the poem the
physical journey on the ferry is a metaphor for
the inner journey that the passenger goes on.
This metaphor allows the responder to experience
their own inner journey through being placed on a
physical journey with the responder.
24Some Better Examples Continued
- Although most of section one requires students to
respond in short answer form there is always an
extended response question at the end of this
section. This extended response question
requires students to respond to two of the texts
that have previously been presented in this
section. The extended response question can take
the form of a letter, a journal entry, a script,
interview, proposal or reflection. This question
is worth six points so your response should take
up about a page.
25Example Extended Response
- Texts One, Two and Three
- Question You are conducting a radio interview
with two ONLY of the composers of Texts One, Two
and/or Three. The subject of the interview is - Not all journeys have an ending
- In one page explain to your radio producer what
you hope to discover from your chosen
interviewees and how you will incorporate your
chosen texts into the interview.
26Example Extended Response
- Answer
- Dear Producer,
- I would like to conduct a radio interview with
Robert Gray and the marketing company responsible
for The Ghan advertisements. I hope to discover
if the composers believe that not all journeys
have an ending. The marketing company for The
Gahn has created a series of advertisements which
make references to early exploration in
Australia. The marketing company has used
pictures of Afghan camels and colonials in
traditional white suits crossing the outback to
remind the viewer of the historic importance of
crossing the outback. Exploring the outback has
always been an important part of the Australian
imagination. What I intend to discovber is if
the composers are hoping to continue that
Australian sense of adventure and exploration by
creating such an advertisement. Are the
composers trying to show that not all journeys
have an ending by showing us that we can continue
the adventure today by taking a train ride? - Grays poetry is also something that gives the
reader the sense that journeys often have no
endings. In his poem Late Ferry, Gray looks at
the ways that a physical journey can often be a
metaphor for an imaginative or inner jourmey. The
persona of the
27Example Answer Continued
- Poem sits on a balcony watching a ferry leaving
a jetty. As the persona describes the ferrys
difficult journey is actually a metaphor for the
difficult journey that the persona (and many of
us!) experience in our lives. The poem is given
quite a dark tone because of Grays use of dark
imagery like dark water. The poem is left
unresolved and I have to wonder if Gray is trying
to imply that not all journeys have an ending and
that perhaps the journey is a dark one. - Regards,
- Felicity Castagna
28Section TwoConsists of a creative response to
the concept of journeys
- In order to do well in this section students
should be obeying the following basic rules - 1.) Take the creative writing task seriously. It
is worth 15 marks. Dont spend so much time on
the other sections of your English exam that you
only have ten minutes to write your creative
piece. You are allotted 40 minutes to do this
task, you should be taking 40 minutes. - 2.) Write at lest six to four pages just like you
would if you were asked to write an essay. - 3.) Use the stimulus throughout your piece.
29Basic Rules Continued
- 4.) Take five minutes to brainstorm some ideas
for your story before you begin. Write down four
or five things that will happen in your story in
the order that they happen, before you begin to
write so that you have something to guide you.
This will both serve to prompt you when you get
stuck and to ensure that your story has
structure. - 5.) Be descriptive. You need to give the
responder a sense of your characters, their
setting and their motivations by using detailed
descriptions, filled with adjectives. If you
dont use descriptions you will fall into the
trap of simply recounting plot (Jimmy went to the
store, and then he bought a can of coke, and then
he drank the can of coke, and thenand thenand
thenand then) - 6.) Use some literary techniques. By this point
in your education you should know what a metaphor
is, so why dont you just go ahead and use one in
your own writing.
30Section Two
- HSC markers have consistently said that
those students who got the highest marks in
section two did the following things - They were able to use their creative pieces to
talk about the fact that journeys have multiple
levels. In other words, their stories were not
just about a physical, an imaginative or an inner
journey they were about a combination of at least
two types of journeys. - They were able to clearly demonstrate that the
process of going through a journey had an effect
on the characters in their piece. - They used the stimulus that they were given
throughout their stories and repeatedly referred
back to it. - Their stories were not predictable. They were
interesting and imaginative. - They stuck to the theme of journeys throughout
their texts.
31Example Questions Section Two
- 1.) You have been given an opportunity to
interview ONE of the composers/characters from
Section 1. - Write the transcript of this interview where
you discuss the significance of change in their
lives, and relate their experiences to those of
your own. - 2.)Use one of the following stimulus to write a
bout a journey. Reflect on this journey in a
series of journal entries the journey may be real
or imagined.
32Example Questions Section Two
- 3.)A selection of students imaginative writing
will be included in the 2005 HSC edition of the
CD-ROM, The Journey. - Compose a piece of writing to contribute to
ONE of these sections - Journeys in Time or Journeys of the Heart or
Journeys across Landscapes. - 4.) You are entering a writing competition for
young writers. The competition is called The
journey. Use ONE of the following images as the
basis for the beginning or ending of your story.
You may write from any point of view you choose.
33Example AnswerThis is an example answer to
question four
- A Solider in my Bedroom
- My mother begins to take a journey
- In the beginning my mother dressed up as an Army
Sargent from nine to five, Monday to Friday. In
order to become an Army Sargent my mother took a
toothbrush and combed her eyebrows upward to make
them look larger. Next, she applied gel to her
charcoal grey hair and slicked it back so that it
sat on her head like a thick woollen hat. The
last thing that she applied was perhaps the
defining costume feature. It was a salad bowl
from our kitchen that she painted army green,
turned it upside down and slapped it on her head. - She did not require much more pruning. As far
back as I can remember she has always been a
thick-set woman with broad shoulders, big
breasts, and thick legs like tree trunks. She
had only to unhook her bra and she became a
flat-cheasted woman with a sizable paunch, like a
military leader that had given up caring. - My mother became an Army Sergeant in 1990 when we
moved from Germany to Surfers Paradise. Surfers
wasn't particularly a place that my mother was
excited about moving to. In the brochures of the
place it looked like the Las Vegas of the
Southern Hemisphere, equipped with a beach that
looked as unreal as the neon lights and cabaret
dancers in the background. She preferred places
like her hometown, B______ where everything was
grey, ordered and efficient. - In her first few weeks of living here my mother
could not remove herself from the balcony of our
apartment. She felt both horrified and strangely
attracted to the women who frequented the
beaches. They were all top heavy with small
waists and thin legs. She wondered how it was
that they simply did not fall forward and land on
their breasts. - In Germany people walk up and down the street in
the evening, in order to socialise. They pause
and chat and walk, not for the purpose of getting
anywhere in particular, but rather for the
purpose of seeing and being seen. In Surfers, it
seemed to my mother, people walked for the
purpose of finding some place to sit. They sat
on deck chairs at the beach, they sat in front of
poker machines, they sat at the all you can eat
buffets. They sat for no reason at all and stared
out into the distance.
34- It appeared to my mother that even the people who
worked here spent rather too much time sitting,
talking, not doing much. She could never quite
bring herself to forgive the people of Surfers
for the arrogance of their belief that they had a
right to accomplish so little. - In the first few months my mother divided her
time between sitting on the balcony and looking
for employment. As a large box of a woman with a
face like a brick wall it was very difficult for
her to find employment in a town dominated by the
hospitality industry. When the job came up at
Henri's House de Wax it was perfect. Her job was
to take the customers tickets as they came
through the door and to ensure that no one
touched the wax statues. The only catch was
that she had to come to work dressed in costume. - My mother's choice of costume was a lot easier
than you would think. On the way home from her
interview she passed a magazine stand on which
there was a copy of Time Magazine with the face
of a young Army Sergeant, who was worn out and
learning against a tree. His staunch defiant face
caught her attention and she paused there in
front of him to get a better look. - We all begin to take a journey
- In the next few years our house began to change.
Not so much change perhaps, but fill itself with
a foreign presence. A picture of that Army
Sargent leaning up against a tree went up on our
fridge so that I had to watch him staring at me
thoughtfully every time I got the milk for my
breakfast cereal. - My mother seemed restless, inattentive, grappling
with so many ideas in her head that she could not
form simple sentences out of it all. She turned
inward and neglected to speak for a rather long
time although it was clear that in her mind there
were rather lengthy arguments being conducted. - It was at this time that things really began to
change in my mother. When she moved it was with
a much stronger sense of authority than I had
seen in her previously. She walked in a stiff
almost solider-like march. She sat on the couch
with her legs wide open as if there was something
in that empty space that she did not want to
crush. - There were days when she came home from work and
did not bother getting changed out of her costume
at all. She did not seem compelled to explain
her behaviour and oddly enough we did not seem
compelled to ask. - Later on, there came a day when I ceased thinking
about her as my mother who dressed up like as a
Sargent and simply began to think of her as
Sargent. I am not the only one who began to
think of her in this way, I am sure. She took on
a new air of authority so that when she walked
around our neighbourhood people took notice. The
neighbour's kids no longer giggled at her funny
accent, rather, they straightened up their bodies
and stood in line as she passed.
35- The soldier leads a rebellion
- On the fifth day of the strike my mother's face
appeared on the front page of The Paradise
Herald. She was standing in front of Henri's
House de Wax as straight as a soldier guarding
Buckingham palace. Outside the museum there was
a line of confused tourists. The face of a
little boy was staring up at my mother. My
mother was staring back at him. Her face spoke a
defiant no. - All twenty-two of Henri's employees went on
strike for forty days. They sat on the steps of
Henri's every day from nine to five holding
placards, singing, cooking barbeques, laughing
with their children and families. Tourists began
to go to Henri's to see the strikers rather than
the wax statues, so that the workers themselves
became the exhibit. - It was my mother who led the crowd so that when
the strikers became discouraged and hung their
heads low, staring at the pavement, she would
rouse their spirits with her speeches. The
strikers applauded for her, workers in the
neighbouring shops left their positions to listen
to her speak, the tourists shook her hand and had
their photos taken with her. - On the fortieth day of the strike Henri listened
again as the soldier listed off the workers
demands. He caved in slightly and agreed to give
them a slight rise in wages and holiday pay on
the condition that the soldier leave the museum
and cease being their union leader. When the
soldier put Henri's proposition to the workers
they got up and left, went back to their homes
and began the search for new employment. They
could not, they said, turn their back on their
leader. - Two months later the wax museum closed down.
Henri could not find any new employees. No one
in Surfers would work there even if he did pay
higher wages. No one could explain why, they
just remembered the photograph of Sargent leaning
up against the building looking staunch and
determined. - Henri sold all the wax statues at rock bottom
prices. They turned up in all sorts of places
around Surfers. Madonna and Michael Jackson took
up residency in front of the poker machines at
Crown Casino. Elvis helped sell chicken in front
of Chucks Chicken Castle. Queen Elizabeth I was
spotted at a foam party on South Beach. -
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- Sargent journeys off elsewhere
- Shortly after she led the workers revolution at
the Wax Museum, Sargent left us. She did not
take much with her, just her army greens, her
cigars, a few pairs of underwear. - She sent me a postcard. I don't know where the
stamp was from, I could not read the writing. It
was not the kind of postcard one usually gets,
with pictures of bridges and lakes and sunny
landscapes. It was a picture of a grey building,
standing firm and efficient, framed by a hazy
blue-grey sky. - A Soldier in my bedroom
- Years after she left I found the museum's wax
statue of a soldier in a little second hand shop
on Rose Street. The shop lady drove a hard
bargain for the statue but when I told her that
my mother was a Sargent she seemed to understand
and sold it to me at a price I could afford. - I keep Sargent in the corner of my bedroom. I
shine her shoes, dust off her uniform, tease her
beard, stick a cigar between her fingers and kiss
her cheek before I go to sleep at night. As I
turn off the light in my bedroom and get
underneath the covers I look over at her and she
gives me a wink as I fall into sleep.
37Reflection
- In what ways does A Soldier in My Bedroom
fulfill the basic guidelines and markers
recommendations that we previously discussed? - The following is the assessment criteria that the
markers use to score section two. To what extent
does A soldier in My Bedroom fulfill this
criteria? - Students express understanding of the journey in
the context of their studies - Students organise, develop and express ideas
using language appropriate to audience, purpose
and context
38Section Three
- In this section students can be asked reply in
the following text types - Essay
- Diary/journal entry
- Interview
- Script
- Letter
- Personal response
- Reflection
- Feature article
- Speech
- Review
39Texts in Section Three
- Texts
- In this section you will write about
- Life is Beautiful
- At least one text from the stimulus booklet
- At least two related texts
- Your related texts can be
- A poem
- A song
- A feature article
- An editorial
- A speech
- A novel
- A play
- A feature article
- A documentary
- A picture
- A cartoon
- Make sure that you choose a variety of different
text types
40Example Questions
- The quest is a journey, a pursuit frequently of a
form of self-enlightenment. - Metaphor 2004
- Discuss this statement in light of the texts you
have studied. You must refer to your core text,
ONE text from your Board of Studies Stimulus
Booklet, and at least two related texts of your
own choosing. - Learning is a journey
- How does this statement relate to your study of
journey? - In your answer you must refer to your core text,
ONE text from your Board of Studies Stimulus
Booklet, and at least two related texts of your
own choosing. - The journey leads to greater understanding
- Discuss how this greater understanding is
represented by composers in different ways. In
your answer, make close reference to your
prescribed text,ONE text from the board of
studies Booklet, Journeys, and additional texts
of your own choosing.
41Answering a Question in Section Three
- Step One Make sure that you answer the
question. - When you are writing a response to any question
for your HSC the most important thing is that you
answer the question. In order to answer the
question you have to first be sure that you
understand what the question means. - Sample Question
- The journey is more important than the arrival
-
- How do the texts you have studied present the
processes and results of the journey? -
42Step One Defining the Question
- In order to begin to understand what the question
is you need to first identify the important
vocabulary in the question - For example
- The journey is more important than the arrival
-
- How do the texts you have studied present the
processes and results of the journey? - The question is asking you to concentrate on
discussing the process of the journey. Although
you might comment on what results from different
characters journeys (for example, a greater sense
of themselves, or the world around them) you need
to concentrate on discussing the process of the
journey not the end result.
43Exercise
- Directions Copy the following statement into
your notebooks. Underline the important
vocabulary. What is the question asking you to
do? - The quest is a journey, a pursuit frequently of a
form of self-enlightenment. - Metaphor 2004
- Discuss this statement in light of the texts you
have studied. You must refer to your core text,
ONE text from your Board of Studies Stimulus
Booklet, and at least two related texts of your
own choosing.
44Step Two Writing Introductions
- A good introduction to an essay for this section
must -
- Be a double barrel introduction. This
means that it must contain two paragraphs. -
- - The first introductory paragraph must
define what a journey is and then define
specifically what an inner journey is. - - The second introductory paragraph must
contain a thesis statement that both provides an
argument and uses the language of the question.
It then needs to outline your argument for the
rest of the essay. -
45Example
- Journey is a term that implies travel which
offers new experiences. An inner journey involves
the exploration of the self, as individuals
review their growth and development in the light
of experiences which challenge and inspire them. - The texts studied in this course clearly
demonstrate that the journey is more important
than the arrival. The texts Life is Beautiful
by Roberto Benigni, The Road Less Traveled by
Robert Frost, Post-Cards from Surfers by Helen
Garner and The Red Tree by Shaun Tan all present
the processes of the journey as being more
important than the results. The composers shape
meaning about the importance of the journey
through their use of various techniques such as
pace, sound and imagery.
46Step Three Structure
- Space
- You will be asked to write about four texts
Life is Beautiful, one stimulus booklet text
and 2 related texts. As Life is Beautiful is
your core text you need to dedicate most of your
essay to it. About half your essay should be
dedicated to discussing Life is Beautiful. The
other half should be dedicated to your other
three texts.
47Step Four Structure
- Each paragraph of your response must contain
- A topic sentence
- Evidence to support your topic sentance
48A Review of the main topics we learned about