Writing Task 2 My Good Memory

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Writing Task 2My Good Memory

• How to write in DETAIL!

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Is this paragraph good? How can it be improved?

• I traveled around Europe with my husband. We
  rented a car and bought a tent, sleeping bags,
  cooking equipment and food. Then we drove all
  over Europe. We felt really lucky to be able to
  travel so freely.

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Add details when, who with, how long for?

• I traveled around Europe with my husband.
• Ten years ago, I traveled around Europe with my
  husband.

• Ten years ago, I traveled around
• Europe with my husband for seven months.

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Add adjectives and MORE detail

• We rented a car and bought a tent, sleeping bags,
  cooking equipment and food.
• We rented a cheap car and bought a small tent,
  some warm sleeping bags, cooking equipment and
  lots of delicious food.

• First we saved up enough money and then we quit
  our jobs! After that we rented a cheap car and
  bought a small tent, some warm sleeping bags,
  cooking equipment and lots of delicious food.

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Add detail!

• Then we drove all over Europe.
• Then we drove all over Europe, camping in
  Northern countries and Southern countries.
• Then we drove all over Europe camping in Northern
  countries, such as Finland and Norway and
  Southern countries, down to Spain and Italy.

• Then we drove all over Europe camping in Northern
  countries, such as Finland and Norway and
  Southern countries, down to Spain and Italy.
  Sometimes we could drive through three countries
  in just a few hours!

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Again add detail!

• We felt really lucky to be able to travel so
  freely.
• We felt really lucky to be able to travel so
  freely. We had no responsibilities and could go
  wherever we wanted to go everyday.

• We felt really lucky to be able to travel so
  freely. We had no responsibilities and could go
  wherever we wanted to go everyday. I learned a
  lot about European countries and studied German
  too. My husband and I will treasure this memory
  forever.

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Now lets compare paragraphs

• Before
• I traveled around Europe. We rented a car and
  bought a tent, sleeping bags, cooking equipment
  and food. Then we drove all over Europe. We felt
  really lucky to be able to travel so freely.
• After

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• Ten years ago, I traveled around Europe with
  my husband for seven months. First we saved up
  enough money and then we quit our jobs! After
  that we rented a cheap car and bought a small
  tent, some warm sleeping bags, cooking equipment
  and lots of delicious food. Then we drove all
  over Europe camping in Northern countries such as
  Finland and Norway and Southern countries down to
  France and Italy. Sometimes we could drive
  through three countries in just a few hours! We
  felt really lucky to be able to travel so freely.
  We had no responsibilities and could go wherever
  we wanted to go everyday. I learned a lot about
  European countries and studied German too. My
  husband and I will treasure this memory forever.

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Brainstorm

• When was your memory?
• Who was there?
• Where was it?
• What did you do?
• How did you feel?